Wednesday, May 20, 2009

Daring

I think I'm finding my groove.
Another one of my pieces was selected at Pictures, Poetry and Prose.

Our inspiration was a photo of a daredevil flyer, submitted by Dan Felstead.
You should go check out his photo blog, by the way.
Laura Jayne gave us this prompt:
"She was the most daring girl he had ever met."



This was my submission:

"She has to be the most daring girl I've ever met," he thought to himself. His gaze travelled over her face. Her pouty lips were quivering with the hint of a smile. Almond shaped eyes sparkled with excitement and ... was that fear? Probably. If he was in her shoes, he'd be scared too.

What did she see in him, anyway? He was from the wrong side of the tracks. Everyone knew it. Her folks told her he was no good. Forbade her to see him, in fact.

Oh, he tried to make her see he was the wrong guy. Broke it off many times. Didn't call, didn't write. But she still came back. Caressing his face with her soft, delicate hand. Smiling at him, then gently kissing him. He could feel those soft lips, even now.

She believed in him. He wasn't sure she was right, but she never gave up on him. Not once. That meant something, didn't it? She believed in him and she made him believe in himself. God help him, he was head over heals in love with this woman. And by the look in her eyes right now, he knew she felt the same way. "You must be crazy," he muttered. "Probably," she whispered back, with a wink.

He held out his hand and she gently took it. Their fingers laced together in a familiar bond. His lopsided grin made her smile as they heard "We are gathered here today ..."

6 comments:

Dan Felstead said...

I already commented but I love the last line! The entire post is a mystery until that line and it brings everything into focus! By the way, thanks for the mention of the blog. I appreciate it.

Dan

Crazy Mo said...

Dan: Thanks, Dan! Your pictures are very inspiring. I'm hoping to develop my own eye and take pictures as well as you.

Domestic Goddess (In Training) said...

As the proud owner of a completely worthless English Literature degree, I have four years worth of experience analyzing and critiquing writing... so I feel very qualified in saying... that was really good! I read, I don't write... ok.

Busy Bee Suz said...

This is written amazingly well. Kudos to you...
And yet, you read the crap I type out? what gives? :)

septembermom said...

Congratulations! I loved this piece:)

marathoner81 said...

congrats, and great writing!!!